Start with your features, but move right to benefits

[Dalya’s Note: This is an excerpt from my award-winning book Writing to Make a Difference: 25 Powerful Techniques to Boost Your Community Impact.]

benefits and featuresConsider the features of your work: the components or characteristics of the actual services or products your organization offers. The details of your features often include answers to questions your most interested readers might ask. Examples might be technical specifications or information on exactly how you carry out your programs.

Benefits, on the other hand, are the tangible and intangible outcomes you are striving for: the great results and powerful impact that your stakeholders will get from working with you.

Example

An organization runs a homeless shelter for families. It offers warm beds, restrooms, and other facilities. It also hires child care workers and counselors, uses volunteers, operates a soup kitchen, and offers services to help residents find more permanent housing or jobs.

Those are all features of the organization’s work.

The benefits are the positive effects that those things have on the shelter residents and the community at-large. Here we are talking about the difference the organization makes in addressing the problems associated with homelessness, both short- and long-term.

Some of those benefits may be:

  • Increased stability and nutrition in the lives of the homeless families
  • Increased employment among homeless parents
  • Fewer families living in cars or on the streets
  • Less desperation, which often leads to crime, drug abuse, and other social ills
  • The sense of being a community that cares for all of its citizens

Here are three related questions that can help you identify the benefits of your work:

1) Ask_yourselfAsk yourself: What does your service or product mean for your reader and/or community—personally, professionally, financially, physically, logistically, spiritually, and/or emotionally?

Example

The Health Trust, which oversaw and partially supported the School Health Clinics of Santa Clara County, worked with me several years ago to document their benefits to the community. That language then served them for years in all kinds of successful documents. This is some of the text, focusing on economic benefits:

The School Health Clinics play a critical role in support of the educational process. They prepare children and families to be informed health care consumers and encourage self-responsible behaviors. The Clinics represent wise investments, as they lead to a healthy community and a healthy future workforce.

  • Each clinic visit will save the community from $160 to $2,000 in physician or emergency room costs.
  • School-based health care gives working parents a health care choice that allows them to access health care for their children, thus reducing costly disruption, distraction, and absence from their workplace.
  • Companies have better informed employees who are likely to make wise health care and lifestyle choices for themselves and their families. And healthy employees with fewer health risks give employers a negotiating advantage with health insurers. Thus, corporate financing of school-based health care can be part of a company’s community development and philanthropic strategy to benefit many constituencies.

(Website: Health Trust)

2) Ask_yourselfAsk yourself:  What will happen as a result of the particular features you offer? And how does that satisfy the needs and desires of your readers?

Example

An organization that provides massage therapy to cancer survivors might say:

Your compassionate investment of $100 will buy a new clinic massage table (feature), enabling our volunteer therapists to provide 50 additional revitalizing, healing massages per week to cancer survivors like Jose (client benefit). You will be helping your friends and neighbors enjoy happier, healthier, more productive, and (as suggested by recent medical studies) longer lives (social benefit).

3) Ask_yourselfAsk yourself: For each feature you offer, ask “So what?” How does that lead to something better for my reader and/or the community?

Example

Our company exterminates termites and other pests from your home or office with natural orange peel oil.

Feature

Benefit

Proven effective within 24 hours

 

It will decisively solve your termite problem quickly.

Nontoxic and natural

It is better for your health with no side effects for adults or children.

 

Fume-free

You can use your home right afterward, with no waiting.

Plant-based

 

It is not dependent on petroleum.

Guaranteed to keep your home or office pest-free for at least 12 months

 

Saves you the expense and hassle of re-exterminating.

 

Consistent with overall green lifestyle

 

You will do your part for the planet.

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